I like this picture and it takes me to happy places. You can't really beat that. The only thing about this week's shortie is the fact that I've used 101 words. Darn I was on a 100 streak for a bit. Oh well you can't win them all.
This week though is a guest photo prompt from Susan Wenzel, a fellow Fictioneer.
Sand And Shells
The sun and sand are melting together. God it’s hot. I think my feet are melting, or is it my shoes? I used to love sand. I used to love walking in wet sand and picking sea shells. That’s how I’ll get out of this. Sand and sea shells, sand and sea shells.
Let me take off my boots. Who wears boots to the beach. God I’m thirsty. I hate sand. I hate the sun. Sand and sea and sea shells, not this dry itch desert. I just need to cross half of it right? How much is half way?
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Loved the line "dry itch desert"--how apt. I liked the part about thinking about the sea to get out of the current situation. Nice job.
ReplyDeleteHere's mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/down-by-the-sea-shore/
I heard that from some one that came back from Kuwait once. I didn't believe them until my ship pulled into that port during a sand storm. Oh the itch once it got in your clothes... Thanks for coming by and being the first.
DeleteI am more familiar with beaches than desserts, but 'dry itch dessert' also describes blowing Oklahoma dust well.
ReplyDeleteWell done!
Thanks. You know I found your link on Google+ instead of off Madison's page. What a coincidence.
DeleteHow much is halfway, indeed? Good question. Dry itch dessert. Sounds miserable.
ReplyDeleteThanks for stopping by mine. Glad I made you laugh. http://banterwithbeth.blogspot.com/
Hey yours was really clever. I was expecting him to say something completely different. Thanks for returning the favor.
DeleteI could have been there. Good piece.
ReplyDeleteThank you for stopping by. Glad you liked it.
DeleteNow the desert I can relate to! I loved your contrast of sandy environments and the different emotions they brought out in the MC. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteIsn't amazing though how different they make you feel? Thanks for coming by.
DeleteVery good job of depicting a debilitating journey across a never-ending desert.
ReplyDeleteThe MC only has to go halfway. BUt yes the trip does seem never ending. Poor Sod. Thanks for reading.
DeleteI suspect he is beginning to suffer form sun stroke. Love the chaotic rambling
ReplyDeleteBear Grylls this is not. Though I think this person might need to figure out how to survive really fast.
DeleteA cool take, and it makes the picture all the more pleasing. The fragmented thoughts worked perfectly for this, too.
ReplyDeleteBrian (Mine's here: http://pinionpost.com/2012/08/10/the-reunion/)
Have you ever noticed that most thoughts begin to fragment when you're doing something long or tedious. I was sure this would work much better than the first idea I had. Thanks for blog hopping.
DeleteI feel his/her terrible plight in that hot, itchy desert. Can you imagine how our soldiers feel in the Middle East wearing all those clothes, carrying all that gear on their backs, plus those heavy boots in the summer heat? Dear God, please bring them back home soon.
ReplyDeleteYes, yes I can. Minus the gear. I've spent some time in the Middle East. Not some place I want to be for long periods of time. Thanks for coming by.
DeleteHaving spent time in the Dubai care of the Navy, I think my husband would relate to this piece, Atiya. Very well done. Thanks for your comments on mine.
ReplyDeleteHey No problem. That's how I got to Dubai, and Bahrain, and Kuwait all sand, everywhere, everyday.
Deleteyeah nice one like your idea of using the same word again and again and yet sounding so different...
ReplyDeleteFor the Main Character, it's all about trying to be somewhere else. thanks for coming by.
DeleteSounds way to hot for me and I could almost feel it through your piece.
ReplyDeleteWell done.
Well I hope no one got too thirsty, that was not my intention. Thank you for the compliment. I was trying to make the grumbling sound believable.
DeleteThe grumbling was definitely believable, and although I don't like to think it, I'm sure I'd be moaning just as much in those conditions!
ReplyDeleteYou conveyed it well, that's for sure!
Thanks for your lovely comment on ours. :)
It was my pleasure. Yours was a really good one. I'm going to be honest and say that I'd probably do more than complain myself.
DeleteDear Atiya,
ReplyDeleteThe curious thing about your story is the question of why only "halfway"? What's in the middle that will offer shelter or solace? If you meant to depict the thoughts of a mind slowly breaking down under the effect of the heat of the desert you did well. I have the feeling that your protagonist is going to end up as dead as the shells in the picture. Good work this week.
Thank you for stopping by mine.
Aloha,
Doug
I had not stopped by your in a while. I'm glad i did. Unfortunately I did not see that far ahead to figure out what was at the half way of this desert. The MC would probably will suffer as you mentioned. I'm sure there would be some interesting hallucinations before the eventual end, though. Thanks for coming by.
DeleteI was wondering what is halfway also. And did he start in the middle (so halfway and the MC is out of the desert) or is there something in the middle they hope to reach?
ReplyDeleteI'm still not sure even a week later why I picked half way. I think maybe this person crashed and only has to make it from the crash site to the nearest station for help. That's the one that makes the most sense to me right now. Thanks for coming by.
DeleteThis was very well done. It sounded very real. Halfway? Perhaps joining a post there? Not important. The story's about the journey.
ReplyDeleteExactly, I'm glad you got that.
DeleteOh no...a beach without water. How horrible! She better keep her boots on though. I burned my feet on black sand once...not a nice feeling at all. Thank you for your GREAT usage of my photo!
ReplyDelete~Susan
It was kind of a tough one Susan. I know what you mean about burning feet, not on my list of "things I like." I'm glad you liked it. Did you look at everyone's story? I bet you've gotten some great takes on your photo.
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