"Ma said he picked up grandma in a truck. That was the first sign of things to go wrong. At the drive-in, his spilled her malt, all over her dress when he tried to kiss her. Then on the way back, he splattered mud on her when he tried to help someone out of a ditch." Faye was amazed that Grandma ever dated again.
"Grandma must have hated him for that…" The girls laughed, each glad she was not her.
"What are you two laughing about?" Jamilla said.
"Mom told us about your first date. What a loser." Wanda said.
"I married that loser. His truck is still in the yard." Jamilla said proudly. "And your grandfather better not hear you talk like that."
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Nice little yarn of family and memories. I liked it very much.
ReplyDeleteMy offering is at: http://www.jeffreyhollar.com/2012/03/coming-home.html
Thank you, I'm glad you liked it. I loved your story. Thanks for stopping by.
DeleteGood story. Want to hear more. Thanks for sharing!
ReplyDeleteMore about the date? or more about Jamilla and her family? I don't know if I can do a whole story about them, but it is something I'll look into.
DeleteI love where you are going with this...a lovely approach between generations...thanks for sharing.
ReplyDeleteIsn't always fun to talk about the past with family? Just to think back on times when things were a little different, and see if something would ever happen like that now... I don't know. Thank you for reading
DeleteFun story. Thx for sharing. I wonder if grandpa heard?
ReplyDeleteMine at http://shirleymccann.blogspot.com/2012/03/fitting-end.html
You know I think in this case Jamilla will tell him later on, so they can both laugh about it.
DeleteWonderful fun story. His dorky, clumsiness made me chuckle. It was probably his first date. Surprised she dated him again. Maybe it was his gorgeous looks. lol. Anyhow, I loved it. Here's mine:
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Personally I find dorkiness endearing. I like rooting for the underdog. Thanks for reading.
DeleteDear Atiya,
ReplyDeleteThat was a wonderful take on the prompt. I fell in and rode along to the drive in and got helped out of the ditch and was even at the wedding. You really crafted a smooth stream to ride on.
Aloha,
Doug
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Wow Your imagination is wonderful. Thank you for saying that. I really appreciate that.
DeleteNice family story. Trucks always have a tale to tell!
ReplyDeleteDont they!!! I wonder if the truck in the picture will still run if it ever gets fixed? The possibilities!
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