The Flash Fiction for this week is out. came out about an hour ago. Thank you Madison Woods here's the picture:And here's my contribution:
She'd been jammed under this little crevice for three days. It was cramped and full of dirt and rocks. The only fresh air came from the hole. The corrugated tin rattled when ever something large was near it.
The man who stuffed her in here didn't care if she screamed. In fact he told her to scream all she liked. The noise would only make him more excited.
"Help ain't coming, you sinner. God is the only one who can save you."
That was before he broke her ankles. Through the hole he fed her funny tasting food that made her sleepy and he personally forced water down her parched throat at least twice a day.
He was keeping her alive, but why?
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Ohhhh, chilling. I had a feeling this pic would stir some darker imagery. Seems I was right, LOL. I'm afraid to know why he's keeping her alive. And the religious bad-guys are always more frightening to me than the ordinary psychopaths for some reason. Oddly enough they seem to have more capacity to torture.
ReplyDeleteDon't forget to post your link on Friday in the story comments too, so you'll get the most possible traffic (if that's what you want).
Also, just in case my comment does make it through I wanted to let you know that sometimes WP users can't leave comments on Blogger sites and when that happens, the Fictioneers will usually leave your comments under your link on my story page.
Your comment posted just fine, but thanks for letting me know in advance.
ReplyDeleteWow! This was seriously scary, as much for what it doesn't say as what it does, if you get my meaning. I can't even begin to imagine his purpose in keeping her alive. A real chiller - well done.
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The Picture does not match my story but for some reason that's what came out. Thank you I'll be sure to check yours our in a bit. Thank you.
DeleteDrama, and the worst kind of nightmare. That last question gave me a chill. Well done!
ReplyDeleteMine: http://writetuit.wordpress.com/2012/03/09/flash-friday-brothers/
Thanks for stopping by. I can't wait to read yours.
DeleteWhat terror! A nightmare! A religious fanatic! Awesome!!
ReplyDeleteI can picture it so plainly...it makes me shudder!!
Good job!
As Madison said, often the religious bad guys are more terrifying than others. I think it's something to do with their twisted belief that what they're doing is divine work of some kind (I'm talking purely fiction here, by the way).
ReplyDeleteYour story is disturbing but there's that morbid fascination that makes me want to know what happened for this poor girl to become trapped in this nightmare. Gripping.
http://garybaileywriting.wordpress.com/2012/03/09/fridayfictioneers-is-it-safe/
That's the beauty of Flash Fiction isn't it? Sort of like dreaming, all of a sudden you're just THERE.
DeleteHi Atiya Your story gave me the shivers. This sicko is keeping her alive... for his own sick, perverted, evil pleasure. It reminds me of Jayce's story where she was imprisoned in a back yard for over 15 yrs. He was also a religious nut. Thank you for commenting on my story. See you next week.
ReplyDeleteI remember that. The guy was sentenced to like 400 years of consecutive time. I hop that's not where this short was heading. But thank you for commenting. See you next week as well.
DeleteVery timely considering how things are going lately. Her hopelessness came across deftly. Good job.
ReplyDeleteI agree, there seems to be a lot of powerlessness and religious zealots going around in the world making decisions. I can see how this would be fitting. Thank you for dropping in and leaving a comment.
DeleteDear Atiya,
ReplyDeleteDeliver me from mine enemies...
Great story and a hollow echo for her prayers. Good job for you, bad luck for her.
Aloha,
Doug
Yeah Doug that pretty much sums it up. Thanks for stopping by.
DeleteVery powerful, Atiya. Loved the second paragraph... that really made it scary.
ReplyDeleteYeah looking back on it now it is very creepy. I think if I were my character I'd cry.
DeleteAtiya -- sorry it took me so long to get here, but I'm very glad I did. You absolutely nailed this and it's just a fantastically interesting piece. I've been drawn right in.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much. See you at the end of this week for the next one???
ReplyDeleteA glimpse of some of the darkest aspects of humanity. Truly nasty stuff which you have written very effectively. Let's hope she is a fighter. I'm sorry for the late comment.
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