Friday, November 30, 2012

Friday Fictioneer - The Kindness of Shiny Lights

This week Rochelle got a little festive and so did I. Strangely I didn't feed from my bottomless pit of anxiety and self doubt. Or my unrealistic fears of pretty much everything. Instead I looked down at Chewy and found some happy.

 Enjoy- The Kindness of Shiny Lights.
Copyright- Rochelle Wisoff-fields


Whatever she was smelling was upwind. It was hot and promised to be filling. Food was hard to come by in the winter but as long as the shiny lights sparkled she could always depend on some human to give her scraps.

She nosed the ground and shuffled closer to the human standing on the curb. The scent came from him. If she whimpered nicely maybe he’d drop something? She wagged her tail hoping to convey her hunger. Then the human noticed her.

“Duchess is that you? Where you been?” She recognized the boy she’d lost years ago.



Also before I forget - Rochelle celebrated 41 years of marriage this past week. Congratulations Rochelle and I wish you many more.

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21 comments:

  1. AnonymousNovember 30, 2012 at 7:36 PM

    that fooled me once, then fooled me again. well done.

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    1. AnonymousDecember 5, 2012 at 3:14 AM

      Ditto (what Rich has said).
      Very well done! Very!

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  2. janetNovember 30, 2012 at 7:40 PM

    The lost has been found. Nice Christmas story!

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  3. Sandra CrookDecember 1, 2012 at 12:27 AM

    Awww. A lovely story with a christmassy feel-good ending. Well done,.

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    1. UnknownDecember 2, 2012 at 5:55 PM

      I wish I knew what to cut out so I can show how Duchess reacted.

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  4. Rochelle Wisoff-FieldsDecember 1, 2012 at 4:29 AM

    Very sweet story. How nice that Duchess should be found at Christmas time. Hopefully she'll spend Christmas ever curled up by the fireplace. .
    Thanks for the congrats, Atiya and a heartwarming story.
    Rochelle

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    1. UnknownDecember 2, 2012 at 5:56 PM

      Yes and close to the boy she lost for the rest of her life.

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  5. Joanna (Lazuli Portals)December 1, 2012 at 9:01 AM

    Aw, sweet and heartwarming - love that Duchess will be back home again. Lovely, Atiya.

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    1. UnknownDecember 2, 2012 at 5:57 PM

      Thank you. I owe this one to my dog Chewy. This story and the one earlier this year with the blimp picture.

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  6. billgncsDecember 1, 2012 at 10:28 AM

    excellent, as warming as the thought of the warm meal. Really enjoyed this.

    Glad you didn't feel anxious, you are a valued contributor here.

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    1. UnknownDecember 2, 2012 at 6:00 PM

      Thank you for that. I've been seeing a trend of my stuff being darker or at least ominous or sinister in tone. Most my my writing is fueled by my "issues". So this was a nice break.

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  7. ShirleyDecember 1, 2012 at 3:49 PM

    How sweet. Love the pet stories. Can't beat em.

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    1. UnknownDecember 2, 2012 at 6:01 PM

      Don't they just make you feel good when the animal is safe? Thanks for dropping in.

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  8. Douglas MacIlroyDecember 1, 2012 at 5:32 PM

    Dear Atiya,

    Perfect POV and perfect story. Tight and right.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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    1. UnknownDecember 2, 2012 at 6:07 PM

      Doug, Thanks for that. I hoped the POV wasn't too off. Your comment made me feel good knowing that I got it right. Thanks for dropping by. And I LOVED your piece.

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  9. AnonymousDecember 1, 2012 at 7:30 PM

    Hi Atiya,
    Loved the way you gradually revealed the identity of your characters and the ending left me warm and happy. Thanks. Ron

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    1. UnknownDecember 2, 2012 at 6:09 PM

      Thanks Ron,

      There was a little hint at the top, but unless you knew who Chewy was (my dog), you might have been a little lost. I love when someone feels exactly what I was aiming for in my writing. Thank you.

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  10. brudbergDecember 2, 2012 at 6:55 AM

    Oh lovely end, and a very nice double twist. Well done.

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  11. TessaDecember 9, 2012 at 6:35 AM

    Starts out feeling sorry for the poor dog and then bang he runs into the long, lost boy. Wonderful story!

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