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This week's photo prompt made me think of time travel. I think it's the photos in the side compartment that do it. It also had me looking for uncommon names and going over the word count. Say hello to Ajax the warrior and Nitya the timeless.
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| Copyright Beth Carter
The Endless Warrior, 122 words:
Nitya heard the keys but refused to hope. Every day Ajax entered the garage, keys jangling and took the car. She knew that the car was the appropriate choice, it did not stop the hurt she felt whenever the garage door closed behind them. A glimpse of the world outside, fresh air, sky and road stretched endlessly, while she rotted inside.
The garage doors made the slow crawl upward. The car’s engine started. He parked it just outside the doors overhead. Dare she hope?
Ajax sat in the worn seat, disturbing the dust in the compartment.
“When and where to?” Nitya said hoping to not sound too eager.
“Anywhere but here.” He caressed the dashboard as she hummed to life and they disappeared.
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Well... your sewing block got you back writing. That pattern book looks out of Mad Men... it will be great when you get it finished... I like the color.
ReplyDeleteCute story... I hope I'm reading it correctly. Nitya the timeless is a classic old car no longer used?
Nitya is a time machine, that has a personality. She's got a little car envy.
DeleteShe got out!!! But where did they go? I liked the names. As for sewing, I think it's therapeutic only if you're good at it. I had sewing guilt for years since my mom sewed. I finally realized I wasn't spending too much money for clothes and that sewing had gotten a lot more expensive! So I jettisoned the sewing guilt. Your dress looks stunning.
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Yes she did. The better question is when are they going. Ajax just told her to go and I'm hoping they end up somep,ace really nice be it the future or the past.
DeleteI agree that sewing gets a little expensive. But if you're lucky to have a swap meet or flea market near you, you can get really cool fabric cheap. Sometimes even cheaper than the pattern itself.
You got an A plus on originality. I'm sure old cars appreciate any little attention.. Nice job.
ReplyDeleteI feel like I have to revamp the story to say that Nitya isn't a car. Please stand by for revisions.
DeleteI got the idea that Nitya (probably) isn't a car; that she's a time machine. Now I want to know what she looks like. I'll guess I'll have to fill that in myself. I love the personality you gave her.
ReplyDeleteI started working on a longer version of this for a possible short story. I'm not really sure what she looks like yet. I do know that Ajax was not the first to travel with her. I think she likes him best though.
Deletegarage doors made the slow crawl upward..... caressed the dashboard as she hummed to life..... loved the descriptions here... loved that he took her with him :)-kz
ReplyDeleteWell he needed to get away, why not take a time machine? Thank you for reading.
DeleteVery original take - one of the best I've seen so far. Nice work.
ReplyDeleteSandra thank you so much. I really appreciate that you said that.
Deletegood for her to say, "anywhere but here. that takes guts." well done.
ReplyDeletein this line - Everyday Ajax entered the garage. here, "every day" should be two words. if you can replace it with "each day" like "each day i wake up early," then it's two words. when you can replace it with "common," then it's one word. like "brushing my teeth is an everyday event." brushing my teeth is a common event.
Well Ajax trust Nitya to take him some place that's nothing like what he deals with on a regular basis. Nitya wants to get out too so where she takes them it has to be satisfying to both of them.
DeleteFor the life of me I had no idea what you were saying. I had to look that up to understand. And I stand corrected. See this is why I do this exercise. Thank you so much.
Dear Atiya,
ReplyDeleteI want one of those. Not sure what time I'd want but sometime with less stress. Does Nitya do over the rainbow? Wait there are witches there. Never mind.
Imaginative take on the prompt. Nice job.
shalom,
Rochelle
PS You are quite the seamstress. Impressive.
I think Nitya can manage that without witches. Thanks Rochelle
DeleteAnywhere but here has a double meaning A time machine would be such a fantastic thing to enjoy.
ReplyDeleteWouldn't it be great to see something new and different? Or even old but still different?
DeleteI like that Nitya is "alive" and can communicate with her driver.
ReplyDeleteI like it too. Since this story was started the two of them have already argued once.
DeleteVery nice little tale of a thinking, talking time machine. Good job, and I hope we'll see more.
ReplyDeleteHere's mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/eye-of-the-beholder/
I might post a little bit more. I f the photo prompt allows it I think I might try to being them back like Toddy and Errol once in a while. Now that I think if it, I haven't seen those two guys since the spider web picture. Hang on a sec....
Deletea machine with a personality, great take on this prompt.
ReplyDeleteThanks. I'm glad you stopped by.
DeleteI had to read this a few times. So the old car had been waiting patiently to be taken out? I was a little confused.
ReplyDeleteNitya is a time machine with a personality that wants to travel with Ajax. She sits in a garage while Ajax takes the car places and she pretty much rots away.
DeleteI like the color of the dress-to-be. I am sure you will do a good job at it.. Just like you dId with the story!
ReplyDeleteDoes the car go with them? If so, no matter what time period they end up in, Nitya and the buggy will certainly command attention. Looking forward to the future adventures of the time-hopping protagonists.
ReplyDeleteLoved it ... original take on the prompt !!!
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