Thursday, March 21, 2013

Friday Fictioneer Photo - The Long Weekend - It's not what you think.

I'm from the city and I love it. I'll admit that once in a while when I leave the city I get a little homesick for the noise. I don't miss the dirty air though. Or the rude people, or the street vendor food. I take that back I love street vendor food.

Copyright Douglas M Macllroy
The Long Weekend - 102 words


“What’s that smell?” Shayna gagged.
“It’s called, clean air.” Marissa inhaled deeply.  
“Well, I don’t like it.”
“Sucks for you. You need to get out of the city more often.” Maybe taking Shayna to the farm was a bad idea.
“For what? Hills? Grass? The grass looks dead and there’s no cell reception.”
“But look a horse!” She pointed to the field, which was pretty brown.
“Oh wow, a stupid horse.” Sarcasm, not necessary right now.
“You’re blowing this.”
“Blow me.” 
“What’s it doing?” Marissa ignored her.
 “Ha, Ha, maybe it’s watering the grass.” This was going to be a long weekend.

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22 comments:

  1. Doesn't sound like she's too keen on the simple life! Nice idea.

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    1. I've actually met people like this. I mean I love my tall buildings but wide open spaces are good fro the soul. Thanks for reading.

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  2. It's definitely going to be a long weekend! I think this sort of visit has to be carefully planned to have at least a few things that the country girl is pretty sure will grab the city girl's attention...maybe a cute cowboy? :-)

    janet

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    1. You might have just invented the city girl's cure for country life. You never know. Thanks for coming by.

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  3. Funny how when kids turn into teens they so often hate nature. I liked this story, the dialogue was very realistic.

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    1. This could be anyone. I remember my first foray into nature I went camping near a lake. I hated every minute of it for the first night. Now I love it. As fro the dialogue, well on my worse days, that's how I talk. I'm ashamed to admit it, but it's true. Thank for for stoping by.

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  4. I'm liking the cute cowboy idea! Once she sees a hunky, shirtless trainer, she'll be wanting horseback riding lessons in a hurry....

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    1. I don't know about lessons but I'm sure I'd stay by the fence and watch.

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  5. Cute story. I agree you've captured authentic dialogue well.

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    1. That's what happens, truly. The minute the reception goes we start panicking.

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  6. Cute story, Atiya. Kind of Green Acres with an edge. Maybe Shayna will warm up to the idea after a while.
    shalom,
    Rochelle

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    1. Rochelle,
      YOu know I wasn't even thinking of Green Acres, but that does totally apply here. Thanks for dropping by.

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  7. Those city dwellers don't gnat to lead a simpler life. They want everything at their fingertips.

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    1. I can't lie, I do. I'm a shameless city dweller.

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  8. To paraphrase a saying...You can take the girl out of the city but you can't take the city out of the girl--Hopefully, a couple of days in the country will convert her. Well done.

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    1. We have to hold out hope that she just relaxes and let the country life grow on her.

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  9. Dear Atiya,

    I love it that your character entertained the possibility that the horse might be watering the grass. Very cool.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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    1. Dear Doug,

      To be fair, it sort of looks like the horse is watering the grass. I have a question, what is that on it's head?

      Atiya

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  10. Yeah, I'd be pretty annoyed with someone like tagging along on a weekend trip like that. Country mouse-city mouse, I guess. :)

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    1. It is a culture shock to some people.

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  11. Love that comment on clean air..

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    1. Ha, I can't say I miss the smell of exhaust, but here is a huge difference between clean air and, uh, the alternative. I think it's more so the drastic change in scenery, than the actual smell.

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