Friday, April 20, 2012

Friday Flash Fiction: Goo

Okay, I know I was supposed to post this lat night, but I was on the phone with a very nice man. Before you wonder if this phone call was work related, it was not and I hope we click. 


So I apologize for the delay. I hope you enjoy. Don't forget to Check out Madison Woods or find other writers of flash fiction on Twitter #FridayFitctioneers


Goo
Friday Flash Fiction



If I weren't standing underneath it I would have never noticed it. I would have been completely oblivious to it's life form. I would have quietly passed below it and beyond it if my flash light didn't catch it's light.

But I did see it, and I regret taking it away from the cave I found it living so quietly. It thrived in the damp moisture of the cave. It's symbiotic life would have continued leeching off the waste created by other organisms in it's crevice. 

I had a difficult time mimicking the Goo's natural habitat in a clean laboratory environment, yet I continued. But what ever factor I left out must have changed it's composition.

Because without that factor it flourished and spread. Now I feel it, growing and changing inside me. 

What have I done?


27 comments:

  1. Is the goo symbiotic or is it consuming her from the inside out?

    Nice concept and delivery.

    Here's my link:
    http://thebradleychronicles.wordpress.com/

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  2. I didn't get that far in this short. I can't think of the right word for what I want it to do if I expanded this. It's taking over her, maybe parasitic? Your poem was really good thank you for leaving your link.

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  3. Awesome! I am a huge fan of the Alien movies because of exactly this. That excited discovery turned to horror.

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    1. It is like Alien, isn't it. I hadn't even thought of that but yes. Very much like Alien. Though I think by the last time Sigourney Weaver was in Alien they "knew" what they were doing. Or they thought they did.

      Thank you for your comment

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  4. I'm not sure the change is good... Cool story!!!

    My attempt: http://unduecreativity.wordpress.com/2012/04/20/water-the-earth/

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    1. Definitely. Probably should have just kept moving.

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  5. Don't mess with nature...

    Here's mine:http://teschoenborn.com/2012/04/20/friday-fictioneer-5/

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  6. For a moment I thought the twist was a human form growing inside the narrator; of course it couldn't be.

    Please, could you change all the 'it's' in the story to 'its'? 'it's is an apostrophe, standing for 'it is'. Otherwise an interesting post.

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  7. Hmmm... "Little Shop of Horrors" meets kudzu! Love it!

    Here's mine: http://wp.me/p24aJS-3Z

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    1. Please forgive me in advance, Kudzu???

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  8. Wow, these foolish scientists. Scary thought.

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    1. http://littlewonder2.wordpress.com/2012/04/20/friday-fictioneers-bats/

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  9. Creepy. You fooled around and caught a parasite. Get thee to a doctor pronto for a strong anti-biotic...otherwise it will eat your insides to the point of insanity. Thanks for visiting mine and leaving a comment. For my reply, go back to:
    www.triplemoonstar.blogspot.com

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  10. An original take on the prompt and more than a bit scary too. Be careful what you pick up when you're out and about. I think the word parasitic is better than symbiotic. Symbiotic means the waste was getting something out of the relationship with the goo. Of course it might have been .... but that, as they say, would be a whole other story. :) Well done.

    http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/04/20/spellbound-friday-fictioneers-april-2012/

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    1. I definitely agree. It was symbiotic when it was still in the cave but once it was removed, all bets were off. Thanks for reading.

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  11. Interesting take on the prompt. I thought it was a new species that the narrator discovered and got with her only to realize it could not thrive in the artificial environment of a laboratory. But the last line made me rethink... And I am still thinking!

    Good piece! Like the writing style and the last line concluded it very well! Happens so many times when you do something stupid and then whack on your head saying "what were you thinking?!"

    Parul

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    1. I have those moments all the time. If this story ever expanded, I'd think the MC (which you made female) would either have too much drive or too much pride. Both would be the perfect incentive to mess with nature. I wonder why the chracter seems female to you? Thanks for reading.

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  12. Dear Atiya,

    Scientists are always getting eaten by blobs. this time it's inside out for your unfortunate MC. An unusual (pleasantly so) take on the prompt.

    Aloha,

    Doug

    http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/04/20/the-endless-sea/

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    1. I read and loved yours it flowed. I didn't comment there though because everyone said such nice things I didn't have anything original to add. Thank you for stopping in again and reading.

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  13. Hi Atiya! I thought your post was fascinating. Such a great beginning deserves a longer story - I hope you come back to it sometime.
    In the meantime, I'm entirely distracted by the "nice man" on the phone. Best of luck with that ;)

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    1. Ha ha, he is a very nice man, I'm glad I met him. Hopefully there will more about in in the coming weeks. This one was like the one from last week. I need to save this one for another project. Thank you.

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  14. That's a very cool take on the prompt. It reminded me of Spider-man and the goo that got on him in one of the movies. And good luck to you with your phone-call distractions!

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    1. He's a good distraction. I hope that he doesn't distract me too much I might never get anything in on time. Thanks for reading.

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