Friday, July 13, 2012

Friday Fictioneers- For Power


At about 8:22 This morning I actually looked at the Photo Prompt. It's 8:54 and this is what I came up with in a little amount of time. I apologize of this isn't what I normally offer.

Side Note: If anyone has ever watched Adventures of Milo and Otis, this picture will remind you of the Dreaded Dead Wood Bird, Otis met the day after Milo floated away. So what? I like that movie. NO I LOVE THAT MOVIE... Sorry about that. 


Side Note Two: I really looked at this briefly and copied it from the Facebook Page. It looked like a really big crow. Upon further investigation on Ms. Woods Page, I found the original file and it's a Buzzard. Man, somedays rush jobs are just not the thing.

Another Side Note: Crows are omens of good and evil. They carry with them a lot of cunning, intelligence and power no matter size. Without further ado...


For Power


“Crow, in the trees.” Michael said.
“Where?” Michelle, his twin sister followed. It’s been years since they went camping together.
The crow perched on a dead tree far from the trail.
Michelle eyed the bird in the skeleton tree. Beneath it’s feet lay a smaller crow. It’s chest cavity open and bloody. The larger crow in the tree squawked triumphantly.
“Is that a Jackdaw?” She asked.
“Yes.” Michael wrestled his little sister by four minutes to the ground. She watched him with horrified dying eyes as he ripped her body open and ate. 
“For power.” She heard, then nothing. 


For more of the Blog Hop of the Friday Fictioneers you can head over the Facebook and check out the page. On Twitter #FridayFictioners. Or you can go to Madison Woods for the rules and see a list of Fictioneer contributors and click on them at random. Happy Reading

35 comments:

  1. Michael is one sick, disturbed person.

    http://logo-ligi.com/2012/07/12/soliloquy-of-a-disgruntled-raven/

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    1. Isn't he though! Gruesome. I've just popped over and read yours. Hilarious. Thanks for coming by.

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    1. I don't think any one would expect to be eaten by a family member.

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  3. Oh Atiya, this is so gruesome and well, sick. Why? Somehow, I'm so disturbed as I had actually settled in to read something pleasant and then...... All I can say is that this is powerful and evocative. Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/07/13/fridayfictioneers-spectators/

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    1. If I had room to expand with in this I would say because Michelle had a gift that Michael did not have. Jackdaws are small crows within the corvus family. To Michael watching a crow eat another crow probably was the sign he was looking for to gain his sister's power.

      Thank you for your comment, and I already followed your link and read your, it was beautiful.

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  4. Whoa, that was an unexpected ending. I'll think twice before I go camping with someone. Nice job!
    http://whimsicalquestsofacuriousmind.blogspot.com/2012/07/friday-fictioneers-7-13-12.html

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    1. LOL, yeah I would too. Thanks for coming by and commenting.

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  5. Wow! Very powerful, and gruesome.

    Mine's here: http://worksbyclaire.wordpress.com/2012/07/13/100-word-story-the-crow/

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    1. Well he wanted power. I guess there is no nice way to get that. Thanks for dropping by.

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  6. Whoa! I'm glad I am the oldest! :P Creepy unexpected ending, but nicely written. I did see that there is a missing question mark, where Michelle is asking where the crow is.

    Here's mine. http://mahjira.blogspot.com/2012/07/bird-friday-fictioneer.html

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    1. I fixed that, and thank you for catching it. Sadly I am the youngest, lol if you want to look at it that way. I should fear for myself. Thanks for coming by and commenting.

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  7. Very dark and I liked the surprise ending.
    Here is my offering this week yaralwrites.com

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    1. Thank you, it's very dark. I surprise myself sometimes.

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  8. Wow! Pretty gruesome to be a rush job, like you said! Lol...nice!

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    1. Thanks for stopping by and commenting.

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  9. Oh that's gruesome Atiya. I liked it :)

    .......dhole

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  10. Yuk! Definitely unexpected!!

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    1. Yuk over the bird or yuk over one twin eating the other?

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  11. eeeeeew. Now that's sibling rivalry at its utmost worst. Good bad job.
    For anyone who might happen by
    www.rochelle-wisoff.blogspot.com/2012/07.html

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    1. Let me clarify the blog addy. www.rochelle-wisoff.blogspot.com/2012/07/arson.html
      This time I remember the "html" but forgot the title.

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    2. Thanks, I'm glad it's not a complete hack job. Thanks for fixing the addy as well.

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  12. Wow! That is one nasty dude. I wish Michele had fought back. It doesn't matter that the pic was a buzzard. The story worked either way.

    Here's mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/aftertherapture/

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    1. Thank you Maggie. The story as it is won't allow her to fight back. If I can make this longer maybe I can do entire back story leading to this. Who knows. Thanks for coming by.

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  13. Ouch! Did NOT see that coming. Definitely didn't need to worry about settling on a different kind of bird Atiya - it worked. Shockingly gruesome. I liked it!

    I'm here: http://mysocalleddutchlife.wordpress.com/2012/07/13/canyon-ff-friday-the-13th-of-july-12/

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    1. I'm wondering if it's the "yes" that's so gruesome? Is it because he took the time to answer his sister's question before he eats her or is it that he eat her? Or is it that it's his twin that he is eating? Thank you for coming by and also remarking on Facebook too.

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    2. It was the leading her there, showing her the dead bird first. A cool, calculated sacrifice and probably especially as it's his sister. He's one to fear.

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    3. Exactly! I was hoping someone saw that in him. Sometimes 100 words makes it very hard to show that. Thank you for answering that for me.

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  14. Talk about sibling rivalry! Ouch!

    Not a bad story for a rush job. Kudos on the quick thinking.

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    1. Thanks, I don't really think it's a rivalry so much as his desire to have more power than what he's got. I think eating his sister was probably just the easiest route to take.

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  15. I like the supernatural story behind this one. Another glimpse into what could be a much larger story. The way you set it up was great and I didn't suspect the end until it happened. I'd be keeping an eye on him in the future though!

    Otis and Milo was one of my favorite stories too, but I don't remember the bird. I have a bad memory, though.

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    1. Okay Roxann I'm going to suggest you watch it again on Netflix or something. Watch it just because it's such a cute movie. Otis saw the crow sitting on Milo's box in the swamp. It was a really quick meeting.

      Was it the two crows, the one eating the other, that gave you an inkling?

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  16. Quite a shocking outcome - I wasn't expecting that! Nicely gruesome. I didn't understand the line 'wrestled by four minutes to the ground' but I suppose that's more a 'language' issue. This was a very strong submission.

    http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/07/13/every-cloud-friday-fictioneers-july-2012/

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  17. I looked at this for a week and I see what you mean by that. Maybe it's all in the comma or lack of. She is his twin sister, what makes her younger is the four minutes it took for her to come out after him. I hope that explains it?

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