Friday, March 23, 2012

Outland: Friday Flash Fiction

This week I bring back Marta and Henry from the first Flash Fiction exercise I did.  It seemed like a good idea at the time. Here's the picture prompt:






Happy Reading



Marta woke in the pre dawn. Henry, beside her, mumbled as she left the warmth of their shared bed.

She looked out the window at the hills behind the hideout. The sun would be rising on a dismal day.

"Perfect!" She said as she turned on the coffee pot. She looked over at Henry's still sleeping form. He would be dead by noon.

Marta went back to the window as Henry woke. He wrapped his big bear arms around her, content to watch the sun rise over the hills.

"We're going over those hills today." She said, into his warmth. "We should dress warm."

"I'll be ready."

She turned fully into his arms and kissed him. Behind him the shot gun sat in the corner. "No you won't."

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10 comments:

  1. Ah, nothing like seduction followed by betrayal. Love it.

    Here's mine: http://teschoenborn.com/2012/03/22/friday-fictioneer-3/

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    1. Yeah well she might be still mad at him for the gem stone thing. These are returning characters remember. Thanks for stopping by.

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  2. Did Marta verbally say, "No, you won't" or was she just thinking it? It would indeed be a short and dismal day for Henry.

    Thanks for visiting mine

    http://russellgayer.blogspot.com/

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    1. Yeah I've been getting that a lot. Marta said it. She's got a very bad day planned for Henry...

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  3. Wow. Such evil in such a short time. I love it. Thx for sharing.

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  4. I was a little confused at the end. Who said "No you won't"? How was the gun connected?

    Otherwise, a good little story.

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    1. Maybe I should have clarified. Marta whispered it. I'll remember that next time. Thank you for dropping by

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  5. Oh my word! Very well written and a bit like a screen play.

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    1. You think so??? Wow, there's a thought.

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  6. I didn't see these (your link and Kris's) on Friday's post. Sorry! Your story packs a wicked punch, definitely premeditated evil. I understood the last line as being Marta's, and understood what the gun signified.

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